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Going Equipped

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I think (.) there there was six of us (.) just the father was working (.) and I recall you know I can remember things poor [laugh] realising [sigh] money money was the thing (.) and er [sigh] er er but I don't I don't I can't really remember no affection in the family (.) erm I'd get persecuted for anything at all that went wrong (.) I mean erm (.) [sigh] it was ever so crooked and warped I suppose (.) a real nasty childhood (.) because yeah I think you see there was a few characters in the family who was spoilt (.) we were sort of um (.) ah well (.) loved I suppose (.) and I was just stood around watching it all happen (.) and I was the only one really (.) this was as I got on to about six or seven who was doing crime (.) who was going out and stealing and giving my parents money (.) it it's called creeping because (.) the general idea is (.) you have to creep out into the back room of the shop where the cloakroom is (.) where like there might be like a little safe (.) em cash tins (.) you have to creep out there take whtever you could and then go again while the older people were taking up the shop assistant's time

Edited Version

There were six of us, just father was working. I can remember things. Poor? - definitely! Money was the thing.

I can't really remember any affection in the family - I'd get persecuted for anything at all that went wrong. It was ever so crooked and warped, I suppose - a really nasty childhood.

There were a few characters in the family who were spoilt. They were loved, I suppose, but I just stood around watching it all happen. When I was about six or seven, I was the one who was doing crime, going out and stealing and giving my parents money.

It's called "creeping" because you have to creep out into the back room of the shop, where the cloakroom is and where there might be a little safe or cash tins. Then you take whatever you can and leave while the older people are taking up the shop assistant's time.

It was exciting at such a young age.

These extracts from an animated film made by Aardman Animations are taken from an original interview with an ex-thief. The first is an authentic transcript of spontaneous speech, the second an edited version.

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